the prose was so good!! It really matches the mood of the MC being this noble under trapped their father's thumb. It felt really gilded and restrictive and yet also a touch of rebelliousness.
Geez, Thomas over here just taking the dagger his distance drove into my heart, then twisting it with his happiness over the engagement. My poor MC wants to go cry in his room now. 😭
Love the update! The choice to call Thomas "Mr Baker" had me delighted, I love the ability to enforce that sort of distance. And I'm so curious who Thomas/Tamsin thought the protag was engaged to? It's really great, thank you so much for updating!
I don't know if we're meant to get the choice between Thomas and Tamsin at the moment, or if that's determined by our pick for Egerton's gender?
That said, I'm running into a few bugs in the new content, exclusively related to Thomas/Tamsin. On the first page of Chapter 2, $t_mcname appears in the text instead of Tamsin/Thomas. Then, on the third page once you've selected your address for them, "Thomas?" repeats three times, with these error codes:
Error: <<set>>: bad evaluation: expected expression, got keyword 'if'
<<set _acceptedKnewEValues to [ "knew", "francis" ] <<if $t_mcname is "$ro.mx Baker">>
Error: child tag <<elseif>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>>
<<elseif $t_mcname is "$t">>
Error: child tag <<else>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>> <<else>></else></if></else>
Error: child tag <</if>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>>
<</if>>
Hopefully that's not too much of a pain to fix, and it was really interesting to read all of the responses (as unintended as it was!).
Edit: just realised I missed a few more. When you're questioning Thomas/Tamsin about how pleased they are, the text says $ro.tone.
This is all incredible feedback! The choice between Tamsin and Thomas is indeed chosen by Egerton's gender. I have updated a fix, and I'm very sorry that you had such a buggy read!
Hello! First, let me tell you that I appreciate you looking at my devlog. As for the current state of them, I was updating monthly on itch according to what was happening on my Patreon, so please do not take it as the final word for the project. Because I paused Patreon to focus on the game, the updates on have itch paused as well. I am more "active" on my tumblr if you would like to ensure that I and the project are alive, though!
Hello! If you mean the spicy tumblr blog password, just download the .pdf labeled November's Monthly password. I thank you so very much for your support!
Hello! The confusion is understandable. What I mean by that is if you choose to take Rabbit's route (the story branches after the Bacchanal, where you choose a masked character to continue speaking to) then you are locked out of romancing Thomas.
My meaning for this is that if you choose to go with Rabbit after the Bacchanal, you would be locked out of romancing Tamsin/Thomas on their official (as in, non-masked) route, but I do think I might change this!
Ah. I see. It's hard when you've got the masked people vs the non-masked people. But knowing there is a route seperate depended on mask or no mask makes more sense. Thank you. ^^'
I truly love the story and think you're doing an amazing job! That being said, I have noticed quite a few instances of incorrect wording. I believe that having an editor could really enhance the quality of the writing. If it's not too bold, I volunteer to help because I feel your work deserves to be the best it can be, and I would love to help you accomplish that. ☺️🩷
Now the things I particularly love: (Spoiler)
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How you wrote the father:
I do hope that your father isn't like this. That being said as someone who has a father who is quite similar and if we were back in those times would be identical… You wrote an abusive father perfectly. The breaking of those he should love… not caring about those he should but rather about others' view of him. The fact that he was so selfish, as to sacrifice the happiness of those he should have protected… just to make his life better. Magnificent and heartbreaking.
How you introduce the magic system:
You do so in such a way that it seems natural and normal as if it truly belongs. Sometimes people just drop magic into a story and it feels as if it comes out of nowhere… it's irritating and ruins my immersion. You did the opposite. It drew me in more and gave me a happy surprise! Thank you for that! ☺️
The amount of character creation and how you have it happen:
Sometimes people stop the story just to drop the character creation which again ruins my immersion. The story shouldn't be stopped just to customize your character. If they're unable to code it in such a way as to allow the story to keep flowing I feel they should begin the story with the character creation this way you're still able to customize your character and the story isn't affected. I feel you managed to perfectly incorporate the character creation into the story. Thank you for that!
The introduction of characters:
Every character is well introduced and seems to belong. You don't randomly drop any characters but instead, build the story up to meeting them or you use them to tell the story itself. I feel you did very well with that. Btw, I particularly love Francis! She's sooo sweet. Again, as someone who has a father who I would have been better off without I love that she (main character) still has a loving parental figure.
Overall: 9.5/10 I will most likely pre-order it next month! Thank you for making this and making it a great day/night.
This was so incredibly thought out and I truly appreciate your feedback! I would be more than happy to add you as a tester. If you could DM me on https://www.tumblr.com/blog/bacchanal-if or send an email to naughtycupidgames@gmail.com I can get you set up on the Discord channel. This is my first time writing anything, so any help is wonderful. It is only important to keep to an 18th century writing style! I'm so glad that the elements you described were introduced in a way that flowed. I worried about keeping the magic system relevent because unless you choose them for a hobby/particular story options, it really isn't that important in the world, but it does exist.
I am so sorry that your father was actually like this. I did not have a James in my life, but there were, unfortunately, some similarities I could pull from. I do hope that his character hasn't triggered any bad memories, or if it has, that playing as the MC and eventually triumphing will help with them. Francis truly is a treasure!
For it being your first time writing anything… I am incredibly impressed. Everything is top-tier and written wonderfully. As long as the magic system isn't introduced and then completely dropped I don't see a problem with it not being that important.
Thank you for your empathy and concern. ☺️ I'm honestly desensitized to it by now… my father is a horrible person but I don't have him in my life bothering me anymore. It still hurts but I don't feel the despair that I used to. In fact, I find reading well-written abusive people is cathartic… I'm still not sure why… perhaps because it makes me feel seen or maybe it's because they (the abusers) often get their comeuppance. Either way, I haven't been triggered but again thank you for your concern. ☺️
Francis sort of reminds me of my favorite teacher in high school… she honestly loved me and helped me see that I didn't deserve how my father was treating me. She was one of my best friends and although I got teased as a teacher's pet I wouldn't change how close I was to her for the world. People like Francis are indeed treasures.
I thank you so much for your interest and support! The Tumblr Password is for access to a secret NSFW blog where I answer spicy asks about the characters ❤️🔥
Just pre-ordered. You know...I wasn't sure how I felt about Edward. But after what I've read in the nsfw tumbler...now I want to give him a chance. I'd say the only one that's a solid no for me would be the Uninvited Guest. xD
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I don't have paypal but i'd like to buy the game. Are there any other options on another platform?
game update?
Chapter 2 has been fully written and is in editing stage! 💜
cool,have fun and stay healthy
the prose was so good!! It really matches the mood of the MC being this noble under trapped their father's thumb. It felt really gilded and restrictive and yet also a touch of rebelliousness.
looking forward for more!
Thank you! This is exactly what I was hoping to convey. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far
Hi, I pre-ordered the game and got the link to your discord server, but seem like it had expired
Hi! I'm sorry to hear that (and I also apologize for not reaching you sooner!) Are you still having this issue
Geez, Thomas over here just taking the dagger his distance drove into my heart, then twisting it with his happiness over the engagement. My poor MC wants to go cry in his room now. 😭
😭 It was just as painful to write, I assure you!
This update was perfect, I loved it so much and wait patiently but excitedly for more!
That is wonderful to hear! Thank you so much for the kind words 💜
Love the update! The choice to call Thomas "Mr Baker" had me delighted, I love the ability to enforce that sort of distance. And I'm so curious who Thomas/Tamsin thought the protag was engaged to? It's really great, thank you so much for updating!
I don't know if we're meant to get the choice between Thomas and Tamsin at the moment, or if that's determined by our pick for Egerton's gender?
That said, I'm running into a few bugs in the new content, exclusively related to Thomas/Tamsin. On the first page of Chapter 2, $t_mcname appears in the text instead of Tamsin/Thomas. Then, on the third page once you've selected your address for them, "Thomas?" repeats three times, with these error codes:
Error: <<set>>: bad evaluation: expected expression, got keyword 'if'
Error: child tag <<elseif>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>>
Error: child tag <</if>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>>
Hopefully that's not too much of a pain to fix, and it was really interesting to read all of the responses (as unintended as it was!).
Edit: just realised I missed a few more. When you're questioning Thomas/Tamsin about how pleased they are, the text says $ro.tone.
This is all incredible feedback! The choice between Tamsin and Thomas is indeed chosen by Egerton's gender. I have updated a fix, and I'm very sorry that you had such a buggy read!
Hello! First, let me tell you that I appreciate you looking at my devlog. As for the current state of them, I was updating monthly on itch according to what was happening on my Patreon, so please do not take it as the final word for the project. Because I paused Patreon to focus on the game, the updates on have itch paused as well. I am more "active" on my tumblr if you would like to ensure that I and the project are alive, though!
I preordered this a while back but for some reason i cant figure out how any of the preorder passwords work. My brain is malfunctioning i think lol
Hello! If you mean the spicy tumblr blog password, just download the .pdf labeled November's Monthly password. I thank you so very much for your support!
Thank you!! I told you my brain was malfunctioning lol
It happens to us all!
I confess I was a little confused. Thomas can be the Rabbit but in the rabbit route he can't have a romance with him?
Hello! The confusion is understandable. What I mean by that is if you choose to take Rabbit's route (the story branches after the Bacchanal, where you choose a masked character to continue speaking to) then you are locked out of romancing Thomas.
Now I'm confused. If say Thomas IS rabbit, then how are you locked out? Unless Thomas isn't rabbit, then it shouldn't claim he could be? @_@
My meaning for this is that if you choose to go with Rabbit after the Bacchanal, you would be locked out of romancing Tamsin/Thomas on their official (as in, non-masked) route, but I do think I might change this!
Ah. I see. It's hard when you've got the masked people vs the non-masked people. But knowing there is a route seperate depended on mask or no mask makes more sense. Thank you. ^^'
It can indeed be confusing, so I understand!
I truly love the story and think you're doing an amazing job! That being said, I have noticed quite a few instances of incorrect wording. I believe that having an editor could really enhance the quality of the writing. If it's not too bold, I volunteer to help because I feel your work deserves to be the best it can be, and I would love to help you accomplish that. ☺️🩷
Now the things I particularly love: (Spoiler)
|
√
How you wrote the father:
I do hope that your father isn't like this. That being said as someone who has a father who is quite similar and if we were back in those times would be identical… You wrote an abusive father perfectly. The breaking of those he should love… not caring about those he should but rather about others' view of him. The fact that he was so selfish, as to sacrifice the happiness of those he should have protected… just to make his life better. Magnificent and heartbreaking.
How you introduce the magic system:
You do so in such a way that it seems natural and normal as if it truly belongs. Sometimes people just drop magic into a story and it feels as if it comes out of nowhere… it's irritating and ruins my immersion. You did the opposite. It drew me in more and gave me a happy surprise! Thank you for that! ☺️
The amount of character creation and how you have it happen:
Sometimes people stop the story just to drop the character creation which again ruins my immersion. The story shouldn't be stopped just to customize your character. If they're unable to code it in such a way as to allow the story to keep flowing I feel they should begin the story with the character creation this way you're still able to customize your character and the story isn't affected. I feel you managed to perfectly incorporate the character creation into the story. Thank you for that!
The introduction of characters:
Every character is well introduced and seems to belong. You don't randomly drop any characters but instead, build the story up to meeting them or you use them to tell the story itself. I feel you did very well with that. Btw, I particularly love Francis! She's sooo sweet. Again, as someone who has a father who I would have been better off without I love that she (main character) still has a loving parental figure.
Overall: 9.5/10 I will most likely pre-order it next month! Thank you for making this and making it a great day/night.
(Edited to warn about spoilers)
This was so incredibly thought out and I truly appreciate your feedback! I would be more than happy to add you as a tester. If you could DM me on https://www.tumblr.com/blog/bacchanal-if or send an email to naughtycupidgames@gmail.com I can get you set up on the Discord channel. This is my first time writing anything, so any help is wonderful. It is only important to keep to an 18th century writing style! I'm so glad that the elements you described were introduced in a way that flowed. I worried about keeping the magic system relevent because unless you choose them for a hobby/particular story options, it really isn't that important in the world, but it does exist.
I am so sorry that your father was actually like this. I did not have a James in my life, but there were, unfortunately, some similarities I could pull from. I do hope that his character hasn't triggered any bad memories, or if it has, that playing as the MC and eventually triumphing will help with them. Francis truly is a treasure!
For it being your first time writing anything… I am incredibly impressed. Everything is top-tier and written wonderfully. As long as the magic system isn't introduced and then completely dropped I don't see a problem with it not being that important.
Thank you for your empathy and concern. ☺️ I'm honestly desensitized to it by now… my father is a horrible person but I don't have him in my life bothering me anymore. It still hurts but I don't feel the despair that I used to. In fact, I find reading well-written abusive people is cathartic… I'm still not sure why… perhaps because it makes me feel seen or maybe it's because they (the abusers) often get their comeuppance. Either way, I haven't been triggered but again thank you for your concern. ☺️
Francis sort of reminds me of my favorite teacher in high school… she honestly loved me and helped me see that I didn't deserve how my father was treating me. She was one of my best friends and although I got teased as a teacher's pet I wouldn't change how close I was to her for the world. People like Francis are indeed treasures.
I thank you so much for your interest and support! The Tumblr Password is for access to a secret NSFW blog where I answer spicy asks about the characters ❤️🔥
I'm so excited about this game!!!!!!! Just the demo is so well done and detailed. I am gonna explode when more is released. You are so talented <3 <3
You have no idea how much this means for me to hear 💜 I thank you so much for your support, and I can not wait to release the next chapter!
Just pre-ordered. You know...I wasn't sure how I felt about Edward. But after what I've read in the nsfw tumbler...now I want to give him a chance. I'd say the only one that's a solid no for me would be the Uninvited Guest. xD